Başlangıçtayken henüz
Seyirci isterim
dansıma.
Beğeni yüklü bakışlar
yüzlerde.
Başlangıç
Yüreğime değdiğinde
Yüzler silinir,
O an yüzlerce figür
bedenimde.
Dansımın tek tanığı
Adımlarım,
Sonrasını
Tutkuya bırakırım
xxxxxx
In the beginning,
I invite viewers to my dance..
I must see admiration
where their eyes are seeing grace..
When the beginning
starts to invade every phase,
Each viewer becomes forgotten
after losing the distant face.
Then the beginning,
that I invert into the race,
Inflames itself with my passion
And keeps burning in any case.
Despite the ending,
There are trespassers who glance.
No need to send invitations.
At once, all viewers begin to dance.














Comments
yer right yer right u know i love this piece more i loved the other piece but this one....i actually saw the dancer and the audience dancingtoo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! loved it! marvelous!!
sayonara hun!!!!!!
I am so proud of me for that...
Goksel
i dunno thats just what I saw i dunno if that was what u wanted to portray but i like the vision i had.,...it was lovely......
JA!
I was planning to add my photo to my page, but I have changed my mind after reading your message...I don't want to lose whatever you have in your mind for my image, even it is so different
I'm still
Goksel
I like the almost rhyme in stanza 2 (phase/face).
"Then the beginning, that I invert it to a race", might work better as "Then the beginning, that I invert into a race". Just a thought.
Stanza 4 is warm and reads well. It has a positive ring to it, I really like it.
You got rid of a line I liked! That's OK, because you've replaced it with more good stuff.
Well done
Thanks a lot...
Goldenlight
--
:: No Way Out ::
--
We are floating over the line
Let us follow our mind.
All our life we'll wait for the answer
And the question is why.
If we're following our mind
We can glide into light.
No one knows if there'll be an answer
While we're morphing thru time.
'Morphing Thru Time' ~Enigma
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